Question by .:: ~Kawaii~ ::.: How do these vampire traits sound?
I’m working on a vampire story set in 1850’s England and would like some criticism on the traits I’m thinking about using as the corner stone of my work
And was actually inspired to write it because I hate Twilight and wanted to write a good vampire story reminiscent of Anne Rice and Bram Stroker ^^
-Vampires cannot enter a home unless invited. Once they have been invited once, they can reenter as many times as they’d like.
-As with traditional lore, vampires love to count and/or untangle things (hence the idea of scattering rice grains in a vampire’s coffin)
-Do not have to sleep in coffins, nor do they have to be on native ground
-Vampires can control animals, namely bats, owls, foxes OR wolves.
-Vampires will keep whichever eye colour they had previous to death / being bitten
-Hawthorn, holy water, crucifixes/crosses repel vampires, but the strength of religious symbols depend on the faith of the user AND all the aforementioned methods are rarely, if ever, fatal. EG. A crucifix coming into contact with a vampire’s skin would burn and leave a scar but would not kill.
-To kill a vampire, one must either, a) stake it through the heart, decapitate it, burn the remains and scatter the ashes over holy ground OR b) bury the body face down at a crossroad.
-Sunlight is not fatal! It makes it very uncomfortable, as vampires are much more sensitive, but will only cause a slight burning sensation (like sunburn) and will rid the vampire of his/her powers and abilities. May also cause fatigue, hives, cold- or flu-like symptoms, etc.
-Fangs are very similar to human canines only slightly longer and sharper.
-Vampires have no reflexion but do have a shadow.
-Can have a conscious, though it’s somewhat rare
-Pale skin except for after feeding. The skin will remain rosy for 2-4 weeks depending on how much blood has been consumed
-Average to exceedingly beautiful. Vampires, even if not gorgeous, are alluring by nature.
-Can eat (and some may even enjoy) human food. The nutrition is not needed and can be considered a “luxury” of sorts.
-Ages very slowly (after centuries), though drinking fresh, human blood will act as a “fountain of youth” and rejuvenate the vampire, physically making them appear younger and healing any wounds, and mentally curing any headaches, pain, etc. from extended exposure to sunlight, hunger, etc.
-Heightened senses. Can only smell the copper in blood only when it is exposed to oxygen.
-Better night vision than humans.
-No heartbeat.
-Cold skin
-Hearing the prayers or chants of a priest will cause pain to a vampire by the way of headaches, hives, etc.
-Sexually promiscuous
-No shape-shifting or flight
-Can become a vampire by: committing suicide, improper burial, dying with vengeance, being cursed by a witch, forsaking the Church, being possessed by a demon, or being bitten
-Easily fatigued during the daytime hours, may need to rest often.
-Will have headaches or flu or cold-like symptoms for no medical reason due to hunger or extended exposure to sunlight.
-Nocturnally-natured (sleeps better during the day, naturally prefers night)
Please tell me what you think ^^ if there are any more I should add, tell me <3
Thank you~
I think I'll add:
-Becoming a vampire through: having a mother who was bitten during pregnancy, drinking a vampire's blood (in general), being killed by a vampire (rare chance)
-Being unable to cross running water 
To Joss: I'd have to disagree with you extensively here. First, I don't think Meyers can write anything--especially romance--well. Her publisher doesn't know a thing about grammar, either.
Secondly, vampires (or any mythological being) needs to stay within the confines of that race's abilities. I.E., Meyer's creations are not vampires by definition. By taking away the limitations of vampires, you are, as such, turning them into (and I quote) "angsty teenagers with fangs". Just like you wouldn't remove the limitations on humans by saying: "these humans can breath underwater, withstand fire, fly, and magically regenerate." Because then they wouldn't be humans at all, now would they?
With all that behind, I'd like to read your story whenever you finish with it, it sounds quite interesting, actually.
And my entire story is focused on the difficult romance between a vampire and his human friend / lover / person
Best answer:
Answer by siamvelvet72
sounds good. I would love to read a non twilight vampire book. Here are some things that i will add, you can agree or disagree.
vampires in some different stories can turn into mist. they can control rats, they can’t cross running water(also spirits) they also can’t touch silver because of the purity or wood(don’t know the reason for that) They have a Hypnotic gaze that they use on their weaker minded victims. different ways of becoming a vampire are getting bitten(Obviously) in some case getting bitten and then drinking the blood of the vampire that bit you and in one story they were even born. In some of the newer stories they hang around in clans almost like a vampire mafia. Good luck with the story. As long as the characters aren’t named Bella and Edward
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